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May 1, 2009

Bait

Author: Russell Mulcahey Genre: Disaster/Action Storyline: 8 Dialogue: 7 Characterization: 6 Writer’s Potential: 7 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Recommend Logline:A disparate group of people find themselves trapped in a flooded grocery store after a tsunami, and they’re forced to work…

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Father of Invention

Author: Jonathan D. Krane and Trent Cooper Genre: Comedy Storyline: 6 Dialogue: 8 Characterization: 6 Writer’s Potential: 7 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:After being released from prison, a disgraced infomercial entrepreneur tries to rebuild his fortune, redeem himself in…

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May 2, 2009

I’m with Cancer (a.k.a., 50/50)

Author: Will Reiser Genre: Comedy Storyline: 8 Dialogue: 8 Characterization: 7 Writer’s Potential: 8 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Consider Logline:A young radio producer’s life turns upside down when he’s diagnosed with a rare form of cancer. Synopsis:ADAM ROSEN (25, cheerful…

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Medallion

Author: David Guggenheim Genre: Action/Thriller Storyline: 3 Dialogue: 5 Characterization: 3 Writer’s Potential: 3 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:Just released from prison, a professional thief must elude police as he searches New York City for his daughter, who’s being…

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Opposites Attract

Author: Dan Ewen Genre: Romantic Comedy Storyline: 6 Dialogue: 9 Characterization: 8 Writer’s Potential: 7 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Consider Logline:When an uptight career woman swaps bodies with her lazy slob of a fiancé, the couple must cope with each…

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May 3, 2009

Keep It Together (a.k.a., Love, Wedding, Marriage)

Author: Caprice Crane & Anouska Chydzik-Bryson Genre: Romantic Comedy Storyline: 3 Dialogue: 4 Characterization: 4 Writer’s Potential: 3 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:A newlywed marriage counselor is horrified when she discovers her parents plan on divorcing. Synopsis:Just before her…

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May 7, 2009

The Romantics

Author: Gail Niederhoffer Genre: Drama Storyline: 4 Dialogue: 4 Characterization: 5 Writer’s Potential: 5 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:A group of college roommates reunite for a wedding. Synopsis:In an old Victorian house, seven roommates sleep. LAURA wakes first and…

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May 8, 2009

Cold Skin

Author: Jesús Olmo Genre: Horror/Fantasy Storyline: 5 Dialogue: 5 Characterization: 5 Writer’s Potential: 5 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:Two men fight strange monsters on an otherwise deserted island in the Atlantic. Synopsis:1924. A Portuguese ship, illegally smuggling explosives, crashes…

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May 9, 2009

Learning Italian

Author: Kevin Reynolds Genre: Comedy/Thriller Storyline: 6 Dialogue: 4 Characterization: 5 Writer’s Potential: 5 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:When two spies happily stationed in Sicily are reassigned, they decide not to leave, resulting in the government sending an assassin…

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May 11, 2009

The Killer Elite

Author: Gary McKendry and Matt Sherring Genre: Thriller/Action Storyline: 5 Dialogue: 4 Characterization: 5 Writer’s Potential: 5 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:A group of mercenaries are forced to avenge the deaths of a wealthy Arab’s sons. Synopsis:Mirbat, Oman, 1972….

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May 12, 2009

Wolves

Author: David Hayter Genre: Horror/Action Storyline: 5 Dialogue: 4 Characterization: 6 Writer’s Potential: 6 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:A teenager discovers he is a werewolf and becomes a target in a small town filled with vicious werewolves. Synopsis:CALEB RICHARDS…

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May 7, 2009

Hot Tub Time Machine

Author: Josh Heald & Jarrad Paul & Andrew Mogel and Steve Pink Genre: Comedy/Sci-Fi Storyline: 6 Dialogue: 7 Characterization: 7 Writer’s Potential: 7 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Consider Logline:After accidentally traveling through time to 1986, a group of losers must…

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The Job

Author: Brad Mirman Genre: Thriller Storyline: 5 Dialogue: 6 Characterization: 5 Writer’s Potential: 5 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:When a group of professional thieves are double-crossed during a Budapest casino heist, they must race to get out of the…

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May 6, 2009

Blink

Author: Stephen Gaghan Genre: Comedy Storyline: 2 Dialogue: 3 Characterization: 1 Writer’s Potential: 3 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:A college student, with an uncanny ability to read facial tics and emotional cues, tries to decide what to do with…

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Weapon

Author: A. Thomas Genre: Action Storyline: 3 Dialogue: 3 Characterization: 3 Writer’s Potential: 3 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:When a ruthless killer is released from prison with a price on his head, rival assassins race to murder him. Synopsis:From…

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May 5, 2009

Ceremony

Author: Max Winkler Genre: Romantic Comedy Storyline: 3 Dialogue: 6 Characterization: 4 Writer’s Potential: 4 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:A young children’s book author tries to stop the woman he’s sleeping with from marrying the man she’s engaged to….

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Protection (a.k.a., Bullet for the Border)

Author: Brandon Noonan Genre: Action Storyline: 1 Dialogue: 3 Characterization: 1 Writer’s Potential: 1 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:After failing to escort a political family through Mexico, a mercenary must cross the U.S. border to find the family’s daughter,…

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May 3, 2009

The Details

Author: Jacob Aaron Estes Genre: Comedy Storyline: 3 Dialogue: 4 Characterization: 2 Writer’s Potential: 3 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:A husband’s little white lies spiral out of control, resulting in extramarital affairs and murder. Synopsis:JEFF and NEALY LANG celebrate…

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May 18, 2009

Tribes of October

Author: Nick Vallelonga & Paul Sloan Genre: Crime/Sci-Fi Storyline: 5 Dialogue: 3 Characterization: 5 Writer’s Potential: 5 Jump to: [Synopsis] [Comments] Recommendation?Pass Logline:Survivors of an Apocalyptic disaster attempt to police a ruined New York City. Synopsis:In the not-too-distant future, New…

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May 9, 2009

…Not to Be

So there’s this script floating around by John “How the fuck did I get nominated for an Oscar twice?” Logan that adapts Shakespeare’s Coriolanus into modern action-movie context. Except for one little detail… It keeps the language. Here’s what the script reminded me of:

Now, I’m not terribly familiar with Coriolanus, but I think it’s safe to blame the scripts flaws more on the adaptation than the source. Shakespeare scholars can feel free to correct me if I’m wrong, but I have the strong suspicion that Logan cut massive reams of dialogue in favor of long sequences of modern street warfare. If you’ve ever seen Death Wish 3, you’ve seen these action sequences. Except Death Wish 3 has guys getting stabbed in the head with a knife duct-taped to a loose floorboard, which puts it a little ahead of Coriolanus.

Because of the focus on action, and the strong desire to keep the story in a two-hour feature timeframe, dialogue has to get cut. Only problem: all Shakespeare had to work with was dialogue, so in cutting scenes, story and character development fly out the window. The entire second act is a clusterfuck of bizarre, rushed plot twists and double-crosses that, I assume, are properly set up and fairly dramatic in the play.

To me, the problem hinges on the choice to keep Shakespeare’s dialogue. Who do they want to come see this movie? Shakespeare fans, who will hate the poor adaptation even if they dig the action (which they probably won’t)? It honestly seems like they want this movie to be seen by teen boys who like watchin’ shit get blowed up.

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